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Friday

Lillian's point of view

So Me,Bree,Audrey and Zayn all went to the mall and Me and the girl's tried on several different outfits and then we found them we paid and thanked the ladies for there help and left we all got into the car it was hour drive back so then we got home at about 10:00

"night Zayn." we all said and then went to bed

"Omg its friday!" i screamed but the girls were gone?

"Okay guys you can come out know" I said i went down stair and Looked around for them there where no where

I went outside and look every where Then I went to the boys house they were not there but the door was open so I went in...

"Hey guys its Lillian have you seen Bree and Audrey?" I screamed
there was no answer

I was kinda freaking out everyone was gonna something in the house fell over so I ran back to the house and looked again all then out of no where I hear..................

Notes

Ohhh mystery.... Hope u like it :)

Comments

No what happended was Niall and Audrey bummped in to each Other and then Bree was making out with liam

Lillian_Horen
11/21/13

I don't want you to be offended, so please take this as constructive cristism.
First of all, your grammar and spelling could use some work. It is a bit difficult to tell what you are saying when there is no proper use of punctuation or misspelled words.
Also, the title doesn't have a thing to do with the story which is a bit misleading. Your title should reflect upon your story.
Also, It's kinda hard to follow your 'storyline.' First Bree bumps into Liam then Audry comes out of nowhere and runs into Niall and then all the sudden they are best friends ?
Whith a little work, this could get better,
.