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I don't want you to be offended, so please take this as constructive cristism.
First of all, your grammar and spelling could use some work. It is a bit difficult to tell what you are saying when there is no proper use of punctuation or misspelled words.
Also, the title doesn't have a thing to do with the story which is a bit misleading. Your title should reflect upon your story.
Also, It's kinda hard to follow your 'storyline.' First Bree bumps into Liam then Audry comes out of nowhere and runs into Niall and then all the sudden they are best friends ?
Whith a little work, this could get better,
.
First of all, your grammar and spelling could use some work. It is a bit difficult to tell what you are saying when there is no proper use of punctuation or misspelled words.
Also, the title doesn't have a thing to do with the story which is a bit misleading. Your title should reflect upon your story.
Also, It's kinda hard to follow your 'storyline.' First Bree bumps into Liam then Audry comes out of nowhere and runs into Niall and then all the sudden they are best friends ?
Whith a little work, this could get better,
.
11/21/13