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My Best Friend's Sister

Ditch the Bitch

Ryan's POV
I watched Jaclyn put on her bra as she got up from the bed.

"We can't keep doing this?" Jaclyn said to me.

"We can't keep doing what?" I questioned.

"We can't keep having sex if you're still with that Vanessa chick," I houghed because I want to stop bringing her up. It makes feel guilty.

"Hey, I'm doing my best to let her go but-" she cut me off.

"But what?" She said slipping her jeans on. "There are no buts. You either get rid of her or I'm gone." She said putting her shoes and shirt back on.

I got out of the bed and came over to her and took her by her shoulders. "I'll get rid of her," it won't be easy and I don't want to, but I'll do it.

She kissed me and she took me by my face, squeezing my cheeks with her thumb and index finger. "Ditch the bitch," and she left.

Luke's POV
Vanessa and I eventually beat Calum and Michael. Then Cal and me lost to Ashton and Vanessa.

Vanessa never changed her mood since I found her in the kitchen. Whatever it was must have really gotten to her.

"Alright, ready to go?" He said as he was getting the keys from the table next to the door. I just nodded.

Cal and Mikey walked home since they didn't live far from the house.

I saw Vanessa slowly and tiredly go up the stairs only to be stop by Ash. "I'm taking Luke home, want anything back from the store?"

"Ice cream," she said quietly but still loud enough to hear. Then started back making her way upstairs.

"Bye, Vanessa," I said.

"Bye," and she disappeared into the hallway.

"What's wrong with her?" I asked Ashton.

"One of two things," Ashton said as we walked out the door. "She's either on her period or Ryan is being an ass and won't talk to her." He said look over at me from the driver's side before we both got in the car.

Vanessa's POV
I went up to my room and flopped on the bed, looking up at my galaxy ceiling.

Ryan not answering is just making me believe that he's cheating on me. Right now it's 9: 42. Almost 10 o'clock. Her recital should be over. Or maybe she never had one to begin with.

I'm not even sad anymore. I'm fucking furious. If he is really cheating on me, oh he's going to be in a world of hurt. Trust and believe me.

Notes

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Comments

@Calum Netflix and Pizza
Aww, thanks love. I hope I do too. Love you name by the way.

So I just spent 2 and a half hours reading this story. And I love it. Great job ;) I hope you get out of ur writer funk.

@Lucy Hemmings
I really want you to continue your story but you could use a little tweaking. Me personally, I prefer if you space out your paragraphs and dialogue because it just makes it easier to read and it flows better.

Put more details! The more details the better. Try to connect with not only your readers but with your character because you character's are their own people with minds of their owns. Let the words flow through you and on to the keyboard. Details also makes your chapters longer.

Just look over simple punctuation and grammar errors. Also be sure to note who's POV it is at the top of the page if you want to continue switching POV's.

Other than that, you're pretty solid. I'm sorry if I come out mean. I don't mean to be! I promise. But you have so much potential to be a great writer!

Hakuna Matata,
Vannessa

Hi I love this story its really cool, also I have just written my very first fanfic called Why now? Why today? its a Luke Hemmings fanfic and I would love for u to check it out.