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My Best Friend's Sister

FIFA & Cupcakes

Luke's POV
I got up and walked over to her while she was putting her guitar on the stand.

"I didn't know you play, or sing for that matter," I stuck my hands in my back pockets unsure of what to do with them.

"Well, the more you know," she created a rainbow with her hands whiled she said it and just smiled.

"So-" I began.

"FIFA in the living in room in 3 minutes!" Ashton declared.

I furrowed my eyebrows but Vanessa grabbed my hand out of my pocket and dragged me to the living room, "C'mon!"

"I call Vanessa on my team!" Ashton shouted while he had his arms full with chips and other snacks going towards the living room.

"C'mon mate!" Calum whined.

"Let someone else get Vanessa.

"Ugh, fine," Ashton said as he got the XBOX controller and he looked between Calum and Michael, but he tossed the controller to me and I clumsily catched it.

"Lucky," Calum muttered but he did it loudly so I could still hear it.

I looked around looking for Vanessa but she wasn't in the living room. So I decide to go into the kitchen to look for and sure enough she was there sitting on top of the counter texting.

"Hey, come on," She was surprise by the sound of my voice, "You're my partner." She got down and I let her walk out first. I noticed that something was bothering her. She looked put down from her mood earlier. I didn't bring it up because I feel that will only make it worse.

She got in between Ashton legs and he just looked at her then looked at me and mouthed, "What's wrong with her?" and I shrugged, beginning to play FIFA.

Vanessa's POV
Now it's just making me sad. Ryan won't text me back and I've never gone this long without talking to him. But he probably just turned his phone off for the recital right? But what if he's just ignoring me? What if he's not at the recital? What if... he's cheating on me?

No. Just stop. Ryan would never cheat on me. He loves me too much to do that right? At least that's what he tells me and what I believe... Nevermind. I'm pretty sure-. No scratch that I know for a fact that Ryan will text me back later. I'll just focus on playing FIFA for now and whipping Michael's and Cal's asses.

Ryan's POV
I lifted Jaclyn by her legs and pinned her against the wall of my bedroom, attacking her lips ferociously. Her hands roaming all the way down my pants and she undid them.

I know its wrong. Cheating on Vanessa with Jaclyn. But I can't help it. Jaclyn is just so... irresistible. She like an addiction and I'm her addict. I'm Vanessa is irresistible... in a cute cupcake way.

Sometimes cupcakes get tiring and the fat kid just wants a real cake.

Notes

Okay, so I just have to ask...

Team Luke or Team Ryan?

Who also is pulling for Ashton & Heather to tell Vanessa?

Or who just doesn't care?

Comments

@Calum Netflix and Pizza
Aww, thanks love. I hope I do too. Love you name by the way.

So I just spent 2 and a half hours reading this story. And I love it. Great job ;) I hope you get out of ur writer funk.

@Lucy Hemmings
I really want you to continue your story but you could use a little tweaking. Me personally, I prefer if you space out your paragraphs and dialogue because it just makes it easier to read and it flows better.

Put more details! The more details the better. Try to connect with not only your readers but with your character because you character's are their own people with minds of their owns. Let the words flow through you and on to the keyboard. Details also makes your chapters longer.

Just look over simple punctuation and grammar errors. Also be sure to note who's POV it is at the top of the page if you want to continue switching POV's.

Other than that, you're pretty solid. I'm sorry if I come out mean. I don't mean to be! I promise. But you have so much potential to be a great writer!

Hakuna Matata,
Vannessa

Hi I love this story its really cool, also I have just written my very first fanfic called Why now? Why today? its a Luke Hemmings fanfic and I would love for u to check it out.