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My Best Friend's Sister

A Fan

Luke's POV
I followed her into the kitchen and couldn't help admire her graceful body... Okay, I was staring at her ass but she has a graceful ass. She went to the fridge and opened it while I leaned on the door frame.

"Want something?" she asked while bending over. Damn, does she look good.

"Uh, no thanks," I lied. I want her.

"You sure?" she said in a sing-songy voice.

I chuckled, "Yeah, I'm sure."

"Are you sure you're sure?" She came back up and looked at me all cute and innocent and shit.

"Yes," She closed the refrigerator door and began walking to another door leading outside. And of course, I followed her. Then we went into what I'm guessing is the garage.

"Hey, sis," Ashton said, intentionally insinuating sis.

"You're not going to let that go are you?" I asked, regretting I ever said anything.

"No, not really," he said getting his drumsticks and sitting at his drums.

I looked over and saw Vanessa tuning her guitar and she became 10 times more perfect than before. If that's possible.

Vanessa's POV
"So which one do you wanna do?" I asked Ash while still tuning.

"I want you to practice the solo," I threw my head back.

"Whhyyy? I got it down to perfection," He's been drilling this song in my head.

"Then you can do it again, and again, and again," he said in that know it all voice.

"Fine," I said and I heard the familiar click of Ash's drumsticks hitting each other.

"Hey, Hey!" Mickey and Calum sang/yelled.

"That's what I like about you, you hold me tight, tell me I'm the only one, wanna come over tonight? Yeah," I sang knowing the words by heart now.

"Keep on whispering in my ear, tell me all the things that I wanna hear, 'Cause it's true, that's what I like about you," Michael sang in his husky voice.

I feel Luke's piercing eyes on me so I look up and meet his gaze. He does this thing were he smiles and bites down on his lip piercing. I'm not going to lie. It's sexy as fuck. So sexy that I almost forgot the riff.

I play the riff like I've been playing it since we did this song three weeks ago: Perfect.

"What I like about you, you keep me warm at night," I turn around and see Ash pointing at me with one drumstick and I put my hands on my chest pretending to be swooning over him and he smiles.

We play out the rest of the song and end it on a bang. Especially Ashton.

Luke starts clapping. Hey we have a fan! Big whoop-dee-doop.

Notes

So... It's been about two months of not updating... Don't hate me.

But I'm starting up again plus I'm starting a new story! Excited but I'm testing the waters again.

Nessy

Comments

@Calum Netflix and Pizza
Aww, thanks love. I hope I do too. Love you name by the way.

So I just spent 2 and a half hours reading this story. And I love it. Great job ;) I hope you get out of ur writer funk.

@Lucy Hemmings
I really want you to continue your story but you could use a little tweaking. Me personally, I prefer if you space out your paragraphs and dialogue because it just makes it easier to read and it flows better.

Put more details! The more details the better. Try to connect with not only your readers but with your character because you character's are their own people with minds of their owns. Let the words flow through you and on to the keyboard. Details also makes your chapters longer.

Just look over simple punctuation and grammar errors. Also be sure to note who's POV it is at the top of the page if you want to continue switching POV's.

Other than that, you're pretty solid. I'm sorry if I come out mean. I don't mean to be! I promise. But you have so much potential to be a great writer!

Hakuna Matata,
Vannessa

Hi I love this story its really cool, also I have just written my very first fanfic called Why now? Why today? its a Luke Hemmings fanfic and I would love for u to check it out.