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My Best Friend's Sister

Good News, Bad News

Vanessa’s POV
Luckily, my last class is my other favorite class of the day: Philosophy. It’s a really cool class to take but not only that. There’s rarely any homework and the teacher is all mellow and zen. It’s not one of those classes you blow off either. You actually learn something.

I walked in and sat towards the back. I got out my phone and began to text my brother.

To A Pain In My Ass:
good news and bad news. which one do u wanna hear first?

From A Pain In My Ass:
good news

To A Pain In My Ass:
good news is that I can hang out with u and ur lame ass friends

From A Pain In My Ass:
what? ry-ry can’t come over and play?

To A Pain In My Ass:
he has his sister’s recital 2g2

From A Pain In My Ass:
kay. whatever. what’s the bad news?

To A Pain In My Ass:
that I’m hanging out with u and ur lame ass friends

From A Pain In My Ass:
ha ha ha sooo fucking hilarious anyways do you mind if someone comes over?

To A Pain In My Ass:
who???

From A Pain In My Ass:
i forgot his name but we sat at lunch together he’s pretty cool

To A Pain In My Ass:
alright see ya home

From A Pain In My Ass:
alright oh and before i forget, ur name on my phone is The Real Bitch In My Life

To A Pain In My Ass:
i better be

From A Pain In My Ass:
ha bye

To A Pain In My Ass:
byeee

I locked my phone up and the blonde haired boy that was in my Art class sat beside me.

“Are you going to stare at me the whole time?” I said, making eye contact.

“Maybe,” he said.

I just stared ahead listening to Mr.Wilson explain what philosophy really is while blondie’s gaze was getting intense by the second.

“Would you stop trying to pry me open with your eyes?” I say not making contact, just doodling on a random sheet of paper.

“Nope,” he said popping the ‘p’.

“Then what the hell do you want?” I said slightly annoyed.

“Don’t get snappy,” he said and I rolled my eyes. “I just want to admire the beautiful artwork that’s in front of me.”

I rolled my eyes once more. “Could you get some more pick up lines,” I say, “because my ears just wanted to throw up.” He laughed.

“You’re funny,” he says.

“And you’re funny looking,” I’m still not making eye contact but I can hear his smile.

Notes

Sorry this chapter is crappy. It's just a filler.

Comments

@Calum Netflix and Pizza
Aww, thanks love. I hope I do too. Love you name by the way.

So I just spent 2 and a half hours reading this story. And I love it. Great job ;) I hope you get out of ur writer funk.

@Lucy Hemmings
I really want you to continue your story but you could use a little tweaking. Me personally, I prefer if you space out your paragraphs and dialogue because it just makes it easier to read and it flows better.

Put more details! The more details the better. Try to connect with not only your readers but with your character because you character's are their own people with minds of their owns. Let the words flow through you and on to the keyboard. Details also makes your chapters longer.

Just look over simple punctuation and grammar errors. Also be sure to note who's POV it is at the top of the page if you want to continue switching POV's.

Other than that, you're pretty solid. I'm sorry if I come out mean. I don't mean to be! I promise. But you have so much potential to be a great writer!

Hakuna Matata,
Vannessa

Hi I love this story its really cool, also I have just written my very first fanfic called Why now? Why today? its a Luke Hemmings fanfic and I would love for u to check it out.