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My Best Friend's Sister

Deal

Ryan's POV
"Hey, baby. Look, I'm sorry and I miss you. Please, please baby, just pick up the phone so we can talk. I love you, bye." I said to Vanessa's answering machine for the 20th time.

I know she's purposely ignoring me because I fucked up, badly. I miss hearing her giggle when we have tickle fights. I miss her hands roaming down on my skin. I miss her lips that always had a tinge of honey to them. I missed the way her dainty hand caressed my hand. I miss her chestnut eyes peering back at me. And her silky smooth body. Somethings I'd do to touch her again.

I wonder what she's doing right now.

Vanessa's POV
We were back in the car and Luke was driving down the endless road. "So where exactly are we going again?" I asked probably for the 100th time. I was looking out the window, wind whipping my face and hair.

"Its a surprise," Luke said as he tapped his fingers on the steering wheel. I sighed. "Payback's a bitch, huh?" I laughed and shook my head.

I started lowly singing along with the radio to 'Wake Me Up When September Ends' while staring back out the window.

"Why don't you sing it out loud?" He asked me. I shook my head. "C'mon. As my memory rest. But never forgets what I lost. Wake me up when September ends." He beats on the steering wheel again.

"Summer has come and passed. The innocent can never last. Wake me up when September last." I sang.

"Ring out the bells again like we did when spring began. Wake me up when September ends," he sang out loudly thrashing his head around and I just laughed. "What?"

"Nothing, nothing," I say after my laughter has died down.

"As my memory rest but never forgets what I lost. Wake me up when September ends," Luke sang again. "C'mon sing it with me."

"Summer has come and passed. The innocent can never last. Wake me up when September ends," we sang in perfect harmony.

"Wake me up when September ends, wake me up when September ends," I sang alone.

"You have a great voice," he said more astonished than he should be.

"You do too," he just shook his head when I said that.

"No, no I don't," he stated.

"But you do. You should sing more often," I replied. Eureka! "Ooo, you should become the lead singer for Ash's band!"

"Uh, no. You kidding me? Your brother will never let me in," he says in a matter of fact tone.

"How would you know?" I say. Does he not realize the kickass angelic voice he has?

"Because one Ash takes that seriously. Me being serious just doesn't even sound logically correct. Besides, I can't sing," he says.

"C'mon, please?" I pleaded.

"No," he said. My mouth dropped. Okay, it's time for the pouty look.

"Lukey," He looked into my doe eyes, "Please? For me?" I pouted.

"Aww, okay. Anything for you!" He says with a wide toothy grin.

"Really?!" I asked him excitedly.

"No," his smile disappears.

"Please?" I begged again.

"Okay, look. I'll ask him about it if you come to every show," Luke bargained.

"Okay, deal."

Notes

Comments

@Calum Netflix and Pizza
Aww, thanks love. I hope I do too. Love you name by the way.

So I just spent 2 and a half hours reading this story. And I love it. Great job ;) I hope you get out of ur writer funk.

@Lucy Hemmings
I really want you to continue your story but you could use a little tweaking. Me personally, I prefer if you space out your paragraphs and dialogue because it just makes it easier to read and it flows better.

Put more details! The more details the better. Try to connect with not only your readers but with your character because you character's are their own people with minds of their owns. Let the words flow through you and on to the keyboard. Details also makes your chapters longer.

Just look over simple punctuation and grammar errors. Also be sure to note who's POV it is at the top of the page if you want to continue switching POV's.

Other than that, you're pretty solid. I'm sorry if I come out mean. I don't mean to be! I promise. But you have so much potential to be a great writer!

Hakuna Matata,
Vannessa

Hi I love this story its really cool, also I have just written my very first fanfic called Why now? Why today? its a Luke Hemmings fanfic and I would love for u to check it out.