To Help Thy Directioners (Reviews and More)

Okay the one major thing I see for your story is a lot of grammar, and spelling errors. My bog advice to people with this problem is write your story first on word document instead of on this. You write your chapters right away on this site it won't help as much fixing easy grammar issues compared to word document. You can at least click the abc check button and it will automatically fix your grammar and spelling errors that will help a lot of readers out so they understand what you are trying to write.

Another thing is point of view.

Point of view is important for readers here, or for famous stories that have characters point of views that constantly change. If you do not write in your chapter title what character it is, or right at the beginning of the chapter who it is, then no one will understand who I talking, and that will lose your fans. So just go back and edit your chapters and write Harry's POV, or Niall's POV, or unknown persons POV, ect. That way we know who is talking and what gang is talking.

Other than that your story is fine. it is a good idea and can go my different paths with it, you could choose a love path that would throw readers off and not expect or go a complete action style path, or go with mysery or other things, it has a lot of ways it can go which is a good thing.

Just fix those two problems and I'm sure you will get a lot more fans and an enjoyable story to read. :)

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