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Okay, here is the shit. Your story Stylish Payne is good. I like the characters that you have built and their personalities really show through the way they talk and act, especially Harry. I like the quirky/unique character that he plays. It’s interesting.

I also like the whole doll theme. It makes it creepy but at the same time.. I don’t know….different I guess? It’s just that no one has ever done a story like this before so I am unsure where it is going which is a good thing because lots of stories that I read become boring and predictable. But, I must say that this story did bore me a little.

There wasn’t much drama and it kind of felt like there is no story, no plot. Like all the information you are writing in your chapters is irrelevant and unimportant. I feel like you should just skip to the action if you know what I mean. Like, I had to keep reading because I had to review it but I think that if I stumbled upon this story and started reading it, I would exit out of it and find another one because, like I said before, it is kind of uneventful.

On the bright side, the grammar is good and easy to read. The characters are lovable and I like how you have mixed and matched their personalities. For example, I don’t think Harry is like that in real life but Louis sounds just like Louis in real life so that is cool. Overall, I think this story could do with some improvement but by adding a few more chapters full of twists, turns and excitement I am confident that your story will instantly become more popular!
~Sophalicious

DEAR OTHER PEOPLE
Stylish Payne is actually a really good story. I would probably rate it a 6/10. I think that with a few adjustments this story could become amazing! It could even go to a 9/10 pretty damn easily so read it to see! Love you all!

Notes

Another chapter people!
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