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Eye Candy
Okay, here is the shit. As I have said multiple times, I am not really a Harry Styles fan so this story was leaning more towards my bad side from the beginning. But, putting that aside, this story isn’t half bad.

It is interesting, the cover looks good and it really draws you in. The summary just made me want to read more which is good because it is always important to have a good summary, otherwise people won’t bother to even read your story. There aren’t many chapters to judge but from what I read I like it. I like the fact that Kyra is so innocent and Harry is so dangerous.

My only criticism, because the whole point of this is to criticise you, would be that I have read a lot of stories like this so I am pretty sure I know what is going to happen and that can make it predictable and boring. The smartest thing to do it this situation is just to make lots of twists and turns in the plot. Crazy, unexpected events that make the readers hooked to the story. Then again, my critique isn’t that bad.

Just because there are lots of stories like yours, doesn’t mean that your readers have read those stories so you will probably be alright. Your grammar is good too. Another thing that I like is the fact that you get straight into the action and you don’t spend much time talking about what the character did for breakfast or some shit like that which is good. Overall, I think this story is very interesting, it is the kind of story that makes you want more and more which is totally a good thing. I think this story is going to be really popular. Please keep updating it and I might just continue reading it.
~Sophalicious.

Notes

Right, here is the new chapter, to anyone else who wants me to review their stories, don't be afraid to comment below or send me a message!