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Okay, your story Looking Back is good. It is really good and I like it a lot. I can see where it is going and the plot line is clear. I love the names of the characters, Aria, Shayla, Becky. They are such unique names and I like the sound of them.

Your character’s personalities are clear and they show a lot when the character talks. Aria’s sarcastic remarks are hilarious so keep doing those. I would have to critique the grammar a little bit. You don’t use capital letters, full stops and quotation marks when they are needed which usually doesn’t matter but sometimes it can make the story kind of confusing.

Also, i don't really understand the bit at the beginning. Like, was it a flashback? And was Louis abusing her? Was Shayla born at that time? So maybe you should clarify that a little later in the story.

There are only two chapters so not much to judge you on but i like what i have read so far.

Overall, I think it is good and I can see lots of possibilities for the future of this story. It could be amazing and dramatic and get lots of votes if you play your cards right.
~Sophalicious

DEAR ALL PEOPLE
This story is good. I love it, it is a Louis fanfic which i love. I would most certainly recommend this to a friend and give it a 7/10. I like the way the story is going and will definitely be reading it in the future. I encourage all readers of this story to go check it out.

Notes

3rd review. Who's next, please send in some stories for me to read cause i love doing this.
P.s, your name is soph_is_awesome and my name is Sophalicious, how cool is that? I know i am weird but that is what makes me lovable. Until next time peeps.