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Black Keys review – Warning: It’s quite harsh
Okay, here is the shit. I am more of a Louis/Liam girl, not a huge Harry fan so this story was kind of leaning towards my bad side from the beginning. I can see what you are trying to do with it. I like the whole mystery/crime part with the Wellington Eleven.

I don’t like the name of the main character, Bia. It seems kind of odd to me and every time I heard it I kind of cringed. I like the summary at the beginning, it is enticing and really made me want to continue reading. Unlike your other story Broken Strings, this gets into the drama and action right away which I like.

I also like the added mystery of who killed her father and if it was an accident. I also like the fact that you keep mentioning the keys so the reader would think “What do the black keys mean? Are they important? What do they symbolize?” but I feel like you carry it on for two long. In other words, you talk about the black keys in basically every chapter and after a while I started to get sick of hearing about them.

I would think, “Why is she so fixated on the black keys?” because Bia has been wondering about them for ages. I felt like I was judging the story too quickly so I sent it to a friend (hope you don’t mind) and she said “I feel like this story is good, but it could be a teeny bit better if the black keys weren’t always looming overhead. Then again, the story is called Black Keys and they can’t just be in the first few chapters then disappear so maybe the writer (you) should have put them in the story later on and the last chapter could be her solving the black key mystery. If she puts the keys in every chapter then it will become annoying”.

Don’t worry, my friend also said some really good things. Overall, this story could do with some improvement but, it is good, it has potential and I think that it is actually a really good idea and a really good story line.
~ Sophalicious
(My apologies but I was in a bad mood when I wrote this so it is kind of harsh but it’s also true)

DEAR ALL PEOPLE
This story is pretty good. There are a couple of things that i am not such a fan about but if you are a Harry girl or you don't mind the name Bia then this would be pretty perfect for you. I would rate it a 5 1/2 /10 and would reccomend it to a friend if she/he was a Harry fan.

Notes

2nd review. Who will be next to get their stories critiqued and their dreams crushed? JK!