Story Reviews

Hi,

I read your comments and realised there are somethings that I should he made clearer. But firstly apologies as you have been on my waiting list for ages, I took a break and then did some shorter stoes reviews because I didnt have the time to do longer stories x So sorry
On to your story:

The confusion I felt was yes, mainly at the start of the story I think most of youre comments at the start show I wasnt the only one wondering what was going on, but I think that was intentional on your part.

On to the parents, I felt like though you explained what was going on with them Luke and Scarlets story seemed clearer and more important

For a first draft, it is really good, Also I find when I myself struggle to write a sequel its maybe because you need to revisit the first story, it must be hard to replicate the narrative you had going on.
Hope this has helped, and again sorry for the delay
Jen x

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