Story Reviews

First a note: I kind of decided that although I have my waiting list I'm going to review stories from now on based on the length of them, for me to be able to give a long story a good review it takes longer, this is why I'm reviewing this story and not one of the others first :)

Thanks


Overall rating 10/10

Ok so you have done what four chapters? And I already love this story its so deep heres a few of my favourite quotes

*SPOILERS*

'And then a dam that was building with the time bursts. it’s just a mother and her son, separated by circumstances, rejoined by fate.'

'Life had its moments, it had its happiness, and it had its beauty. That was what we were taught in school.'

I just love you're style its so absorbing (sounds weird ;p) it makes you want to click on the next chapter so bad even though theres other stuff you have to do (haha homework can wait)

You have set up a basis for a story to be built upon that is Solid (capital S and everything ;p)

Were the same age and if I had half your skills I would be writing all the time haha

So heres my list of what I love (I dont dislike anything or need you to improve anything):

• Structure
• Character Empathy
• Clear Emotions
• No babble (chapters that aren't needed conversations that are useless)
• Clear direction
• & finally a strong start

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