Overall Rating 5/10 (i feel mean now :( )

Okay so I have to give my honest review even if I dont want to upset anyone please remember nothing here is personal :) just doing what I promised xx

So there are some improvements I think need to be made:

1. At the beginning when Laura's parents die its really sudden and kind of strange (sorry!) because you dont really know her character yet or empathise with her, as a kind of main point in the story I think it would have been better for us to get to know her a bit more, making it seem more major
2. The lack of emotion- for someone who's parents died ( I dont know exactly what their relationship was like) but she seems to get over it pretty quickly :/
3. The whole storyline is a bit lacking in originality (sorry) and it just seems to be going really fast

God, I feel so horrible now so heres some good points:

1. Good Structure
2. Some strong chapters and relatable moments
3. The sibling relationship is good
4. Consistent writing style (even though I think there are different authors)

Overall spelling and punctuation was good
Sorry ( I apologise alot) if any of this offended you xx

Thanks btw for commenting on Bittersweet Revenge :)
xx Jen

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