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You aren't going to leave me even after I lied

Summary

I'm pregnant.
Louis's a concerned father to be.

Characters

Louis tomlinson

Louis tomlinson

daddy to be

me

me

mumma to be

Chapters

  1. 1

  2. 2

  3. note

  4. another note

  5. new story

    its called Perfect zayns not in this one

  6. 3

    hi guys so I decided to finish the story.xxx

  7. author's note

Comments

i really love it, even though it's moving really fast, but i love the plot haha

@qoodvibes
Sure hope my new on is a bit better

Louis'lolies Louis'lolies
11/4/15

@Liamharrylouisandniall
Thanx much appreciated will read more please also tell me what you think of my new story

Louis'lolies Louis'lolies
11/4/15

The structure of a play is actually quite unique, maybe even difficult when it comes to fan-fiction. However, even though you have the structure, your story is still missing a huge chunk.

I agree, you should keep this story on pause and go ahed to read some other pieces from some different authors. After that, perhaps you'll feel more confident to write your story.

Again, you story has potential but perhaps you need to think more about the quality of your writing?


qoodvibes qoodvibes
10/29/15

Honestly I'm not trying to hate but your moving a little bit too fast. I think you should read a few more stories and see how they type/act out a story. Once again this is not hate it is constructive criticism.