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My Best Friend's Sister

Far From Over

Luke's POV
After Vanessa end the call from Ash we went over and shared some amazingly delicious pink cottoncandy. "So where to next, beautiful?" I asked her while picking off some cottoncandy. She smiled and blushed slightly.

"Ooo," I followed her gaze behind me to a wooden platform. "Come dance with me," she said trying to drag me along.

"Vanessa, I-I," I began but she still tugged, begging me to go.

"Please, it'll be fun!" She was still pulling on my arm, making tracks from my converses.

"But I don't dance," I said through my teeth. She's so damn persistent.

In a blink of an eye, I was on the wooden platform and they had just switched songs to some electronic song or whatever. It was surely something I've never heard of.

Vanessa pressed up against my front with her ass and began to grind on me. I'm not going to lie and say that I didn't like it but it seem kinda early in our unofficial relationship but like I said, I didn't say I didn't like it so I made no efforts in stopping her.

I put one hand on her waist as she moved her hips along on me back and forth. I then kissed her neck softly. A smile and blush appeared on her face. I smirked.

The night was far from over.

Notes

Sorry for the prolonged hiatus but had to do it to keep intact with the internet world I call home. I've been in the hell I call writer's block. I knew we would tango at some point in the story (all writers do... unless you're a 'bad' writer) but I have not gave up yet! Furthermore, I think I would like an outsider's view so they can help write the story. If interested, you know how to contact me.

Hakuna Matata my friends because the sun will rise tomorrow,
Vannessa

Comments

@Calum Netflix and Pizza
Aww, thanks love. I hope I do too. Love you name by the way.

So I just spent 2 and a half hours reading this story. And I love it. Great job ;) I hope you get out of ur writer funk.

@Lucy Hemmings
I really want you to continue your story but you could use a little tweaking. Me personally, I prefer if you space out your paragraphs and dialogue because it just makes it easier to read and it flows better.

Put more details! The more details the better. Try to connect with not only your readers but with your character because you character's are their own people with minds of their owns. Let the words flow through you and on to the keyboard. Details also makes your chapters longer.

Just look over simple punctuation and grammar errors. Also be sure to note who's POV it is at the top of the page if you want to continue switching POV's.

Other than that, you're pretty solid. I'm sorry if I come out mean. I don't mean to be! I promise. But you have so much potential to be a great writer!

Hakuna Matata,
Vannessa

Hi I love this story its really cool, also I have just written my very first fanfic called Why now? Why today? its a Luke Hemmings fanfic and I would love for u to check it out.