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My Best Friend's Sister

Brotherly & Sisterly Love

Ashton's POV
I was back at my place with Cal and Mikey pacing back and forth in the living room. It has been two hours since school has been let out and I haven't seen or heard of her since. I called her and texted her but she wouldn't reply. The one time I need her to answer her phone, she has it off.

"Dude, you've been pacing ever since we got here," Cal said.

"Yeah, man. You just need to sit down and relax," Michael ended.

"How can I sit down and relax when I know my baby sister is out there somewhere?! She could be alone! She could be in a serial killers' house! She could be doing unspeakable things!" I exploded.

"Or I could be right here," I whipped around and saw Vanessa next to the staircase. She must have came in when I was ranting and I didn't hear her.

"Where the hell were you? Why didn't you go to your classes?" I questioned her. She had me worried so I needed some answers.

"Why do you care?" She asks sassily.

"Because I'm you're fucking brother and I have the right to know where my little sister has been for over three hours!" I yelled at her. I never yelled at Vanessa before.

"As far as I'm concerned, it's none of your business what I do, who I do what with, and where I'm at. So just calm down and relax," She said. She was beginning up the stairs but I blocked her. We weren't done having this discussion.

"You had me worried-" She cut me off.

"I didn't tell you to be worried, so don't be," Vanessa tried to walk away from me.

"I wouldn't have to if you would just answer my fucking texts and calls!" I yelled some more.

"I don't answer to you!" She yelled back. Now we're both yelling.

"You're younger, I'm older! You're suppose to answer to me!" It's been like that since the day she was born.

"You've been using that against me since we were kids, Ashton! When are you going to realize that I'm not a baby anymore? I can make decisions for myself and whatever the consequences are, I'll face them like an adult," Vanessa said but she will always be my baby sister.

"Oh really? What decisions can you make for yourself?" I asked her circling back into the living room.

"Well, I chose to fuck Michael and Calum," My head turned. My eyes filled with rage at my two best friends who betrayed me. They had shocked looks on their faces. "Yeah, lil sis isn't a virgin either."

"Oh my fuck," I said hand running through my hair.

"That's what Michael said," Vanessa said right behind me.

"That's not the point!" I said trying to get that out of my head. "The point is that you were gone and you didn't tell me! I was worried sick about you!" I said to her.

"Stop trying to act like dad," she stated. What? Acting like the person I hate?

"What?" I said clearly confused at what she said.

"Stop trying to be like dad because that's what you're trying to be. You don't think I know that you wear his cologne? That you try to be just like him? Ashton, you're not dad and you never will be," She said coming closer to my face. "So stop acting like him." She was in my face now. Tears welled up in my eyes.

"What are you going to do now? Cry?" She taunted me. "Is the big bad wolf going to cry?" Then she smirked and that sent me over the edge.

I slammed her body to the wall forcefully and pinned her there. She was scared but she didn't show it but I knew she was scared. She wanted to her keep badass facade strong.

"Hit me! Do it, Ashton! Hit me!" She taunted some more.

"Ash, don't do it," Michael tried to calm me.

"This isn't you man," Calum said shakily, afraid of what I was going to do.

Then I raised my fist...

Notes

Meep...

Comments

@Calum Netflix and Pizza
Aww, thanks love. I hope I do too. Love you name by the way.

So I just spent 2 and a half hours reading this story. And I love it. Great job ;) I hope you get out of ur writer funk.

@Lucy Hemmings
I really want you to continue your story but you could use a little tweaking. Me personally, I prefer if you space out your paragraphs and dialogue because it just makes it easier to read and it flows better.

Put more details! The more details the better. Try to connect with not only your readers but with your character because you character's are their own people with minds of their owns. Let the words flow through you and on to the keyboard. Details also makes your chapters longer.

Just look over simple punctuation and grammar errors. Also be sure to note who's POV it is at the top of the page if you want to continue switching POV's.

Other than that, you're pretty solid. I'm sorry if I come out mean. I don't mean to be! I promise. But you have so much potential to be a great writer!

Hakuna Matata,
Vannessa

Hi I love this story its really cool, also I have just written my very first fanfic called Why now? Why today? its a Luke Hemmings fanfic and I would love for u to check it out.