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My Best Friend's Sister

Missing

Ashton's POV
Its the end of the day and I waited outside her Psych class. She never came out. I walked in and saw Mr. Quinn cleaning up, getting ready to leave.

"Hey, Mr. Quinn," His head lifted up from organizing his papers. "Have you seen Vanessa?"

"I should be asking you that question," he said as he put his papers and laptop into his leather bag. "She only attended one class today." Then he walked out.

Where could she be? She's not the one to be skipping and missing class. I ran out the classroom looking for Mikey and Calum.

When I got outside I saw them waiting on me by my car. I ran up to them frantically. "Have you guys seen Vanessa?" They shook their heads.

"Why? What's up?" Cal asks.

"She's not here," I said running my fingers through my hair in frustration. "She didn't got to three of her classes today."

"Hey, don't sweat it," Mikey said putting his hand on me trying to calm me down. "Maybe she just ditched for the rest of the day."

I shook my head. "She'd never do that," I said. My head was running through lists where she could possible be.

"Well, maybe she's with Luke," Cal suggested.

"Why would she be with him?" As far as I know, she doesn't even like Luke.

"Because he's not here either," Cal said. "We haven't seen him all day." Maybe they are together. Maybe Luke pressured her to skip with him. Maybe Luke's trying to-

"Hey, Ash?" Mikey said snapping me out of my thoughts."You okay?"

"Get in the car," I simply said and they did as I raced off campus in search of my little sister.

Notes

Updating again soon :)

Comments

@Calum Netflix and Pizza
Aww, thanks love. I hope I do too. Love you name by the way.

So I just spent 2 and a half hours reading this story. And I love it. Great job ;) I hope you get out of ur writer funk.

@Lucy Hemmings
I really want you to continue your story but you could use a little tweaking. Me personally, I prefer if you space out your paragraphs and dialogue because it just makes it easier to read and it flows better.

Put more details! The more details the better. Try to connect with not only your readers but with your character because you character's are their own people with minds of their owns. Let the words flow through you and on to the keyboard. Details also makes your chapters longer.

Just look over simple punctuation and grammar errors. Also be sure to note who's POV it is at the top of the page if you want to continue switching POV's.

Other than that, you're pretty solid. I'm sorry if I come out mean. I don't mean to be! I promise. But you have so much potential to be a great writer!

Hakuna Matata,
Vannessa

Hi I love this story its really cool, also I have just written my very first fanfic called Why now? Why today? its a Luke Hemmings fanfic and I would love for u to check it out.