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My Best Friend's Sister

Liar

Vanessa's POV
I sat in the back with Luke and when I approached, I saw the smile slide right off his face. He knows.

"Hey, what's up?" He looked at me all worried and shit.

"Nothing," I say nonchalantly.

"You sure? It doesn't look like nothing," Don't flip shit, don't flip shit.

"I'm sure," I gave him a reassuring look and smile that made him smile back.

Luke's POV
She's lying and I can totally see it written on her face but I decide not to push it. Ashton will tell me later.

"Goodmorning," the teacher said as the bell rang, making me look away from Vanessa.

I slid back in my seat, relaxing. I look back over at Vanessa. She's chewing on her lip pretty hard but she doesn't know how cute she looks.

"Hey," She looks to me and raises her eyebrows, "You're going to bleed if you keep doing that." She released her bottom lip from in between her teeth.

"So lets begin the day with..." the teacher began while he was doing something on his computer. "Notes." He said as the presentation came up and there were a chorus of grunts and groans.

Notes

Updating again today so don't be disappointed.

Comments

@Calum Netflix and Pizza
Aww, thanks love. I hope I do too. Love you name by the way.

So I just spent 2 and a half hours reading this story. And I love it. Great job ;) I hope you get out of ur writer funk.

@Lucy Hemmings
I really want you to continue your story but you could use a little tweaking. Me personally, I prefer if you space out your paragraphs and dialogue because it just makes it easier to read and it flows better.

Put more details! The more details the better. Try to connect with not only your readers but with your character because you character's are their own people with minds of their owns. Let the words flow through you and on to the keyboard. Details also makes your chapters longer.

Just look over simple punctuation and grammar errors. Also be sure to note who's POV it is at the top of the page if you want to continue switching POV's.

Other than that, you're pretty solid. I'm sorry if I come out mean. I don't mean to be! I promise. But you have so much potential to be a great writer!

Hakuna Matata,
Vannessa

Hi I love this story its really cool, also I have just written my very first fanfic called Why now? Why today? its a Luke Hemmings fanfic and I would love for u to check it out.