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My Best Friend's Sister

First Day

Vanessa's POV
I got dressed, ran downstairs, grabbed my keys from the bowl, and my knapsack next to the door. I didn't even bother waking up Ash. Let him be late for the first day of school.

I don't get why people say first day of school, unless you're new to the school, I get it. But if you've already been there, where's your firsts? I mean, you have all your original friends, the teachers that's been here since the early 70's and 80's. Nothing's really new. Except that they repaint the school over the summer. Other than that Camberwell High has stayed the same.

I parked in my usual spot in front of the school. I got out of my car and went around to grab my knapsack in the passenger's seat. I locked the door as I walked away, hearing the 'beep, beep' as I successfully locked my car.

I went to my locker to put some books I didn't need inside when I felt a familiar set of hand grab hold of my waist. Ryan.

"Hey, babe," I smiled. Ryan and I started dating at the end of last year. Ryan is the prime example of a perfect boyfriend that all the girls want. He has the body, the hair, the eyes, the lips. I didn't think he would pick me. I mean, I'm well known, but I didn't think he would actually take notice to me. Did I mention he's captain of the football team?

"Hey, Ry," I said back, closing my locker to turn and face him.

"What are you doing later today?" He asked me.

"Not sure," I said. We're literally glued together.

"How about you finished what you started last night," he smirked.

"Mmm, I'll think about it," I pecked his lips.

"You'll think about it? Is that a yes?" Staring at my lips.

"It's not a yes but it's not entirely a no either," We began to walk down the hallway, his arm around my shoulder.

"Okay, how about movies at your place?" He asked me as we stopped at my first class for the day.

"Hmm," I pretended to think and tapped my fore finger to my chin, "Sure."

"Alright, see you at lunch?" I nodded and we kissed until the bell rang throughout the hallways. "Gotta go," he pecked my lips one more time and ran off.

I walked inside my class and I went to the back of the class. It's not that I didn't want to sit up front, it was just that everyone was already seated there.

This year, I'm just going to get on the good side of the teachers and not get caught up in drama. It's gonna be like cake... Right?

Luke's POV
Just then an model walked in. I'm being serious. She floated with such grace. She sat and just looked ahead. I wonder who she is...

Notes

Sorry Luke's POV was sooooo short!

Comments

@Calum Netflix and Pizza
Aww, thanks love. I hope I do too. Love you name by the way.

So I just spent 2 and a half hours reading this story. And I love it. Great job ;) I hope you get out of ur writer funk.

@Lucy Hemmings
I really want you to continue your story but you could use a little tweaking. Me personally, I prefer if you space out your paragraphs and dialogue because it just makes it easier to read and it flows better.

Put more details! The more details the better. Try to connect with not only your readers but with your character because you character's are their own people with minds of their owns. Let the words flow through you and on to the keyboard. Details also makes your chapters longer.

Just look over simple punctuation and grammar errors. Also be sure to note who's POV it is at the top of the page if you want to continue switching POV's.

Other than that, you're pretty solid. I'm sorry if I come out mean. I don't mean to be! I promise. But you have so much potential to be a great writer!

Hakuna Matata,
Vannessa

Hi I love this story its really cool, also I have just written my very first fanfic called Why now? Why today? its a Luke Hemmings fanfic and I would love for u to check it out.