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So the story is about and upcoming model who is named Lia Sophia. She is going to London for her work but on her way to London, she meets Niall at the appartement complex where she lives in. Niall helps her to Carry her luggage and before she's on her plane to London, Niall gives her his number.

In London she meets Zayn because he's being chased by crazy fans and media. Zayn Goes back with Lia to her place that she is Sharing for a while with Dana. (Her best friend). Dana and Lia go to a club and get drunk. When They're home again. Dana makes out with Zayn and Lia is making out with Harry.

When all the boys are coming over with their girlfriends they have a fun night but. Lia gets a call from her manager and that she has to be in new York for something victoria's secret angels. While she is there she gets a beautiful boyfriend and becomes friends with her boyfriend's sister. Harry and Niall go to new York and Niall says that she can't just get over a guy by kissing another attractive guy. To prove Niall is wrong Lia kisses him and she Lets it go quite quickly but she gets kissed by Niall.

Questions I had while reading this.
-why does Harry kiss her while they only met 5 minutes ago?
-Zai is really weird.. I mean no one's sister should say that you could date another guy than the sister's brother.
-It is really weird that she just meets 2/5 of one direction just in one day?

Bad things about the story.
-I liked the story but I just found it a little bit boring because the story is a bit basic and I read alot stories like these and yeah... Then it becomes quite boring but it's not you but yeah...

good things.
-hardly any grammar or spelling mistakes. One time I noticed I noticed that there. Was supposed to be an ' but I only saw it one time.

my favorite part of the fanfic.

-“Lia..I know Harry too, and theres two sides. Zai and I will sort differences, and make peace. MAYBE for you, we can become acquaintances. But that’s not my point…Course you can just say falling for someone new is easy, but you can’t just find someone attractive, and kiss him, and move on from the previous.. You just can’t…” But for some reason something just urged me to prove him wrong.

And in the blink of an eye, I grabbed Niall’s face, and kissed him passionately. His warm lips pressed into mine, sent a warm tingle all over, nothing compared to Harry’s but something you could get accustomed too. I pulled back quickly, and peered up at out of breath, and completely confused Niall.

“It is easy..” And I walked away, but was swooped back again. This time not kissing him, but him kissing me.

“Sorry…I ….reflex…I should go…” He scratched the back of his head, and I looked over to see starstruck Zai. A obvious smirk plastered across her face…but she mouthed ‘I’m sorry’ before grabbing Niall and pulling him indoors.

it just makes me feel like i'm a Niall's girl but no Liam and Louis already have my heart.

overal grade: 6.5/10

my advice: many people love your story and I'm sorry that i'm not one of them but I like it and with some stories i'm like Why does this even exist? But yeah... Just keep doing what you love doing and I will wish you good luck!

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