Story Reviews by Foodaddict

Yay another original story!!!

No clichés so far as I can tell:) so thank you for that!

The plot is the cutest thing, and I love Harry and Alyssa together. Alyssa's charcter is perfect, and the twins are so annoying!!! (But in a way good to the story)

I kind of saw where that last chapter was going and I'm going to give you some advice. Its up to you whether you choose to follow it. In my opinion nothing ruins a story faster than a smug scene.

Sometimes a smut scene can bring more views, but is that really how you want to get views? Please just dont even go there.

I give your story 4.6 out of 5 stars. Thank you, and keep writing.

Notes

Please don't take any of this personally. I mean this only as constructive criticism, and am not a professional. Please rate this review in the votes/comments. Thank you!