Author's Note

Ten, ten, ten, ten, eleven

Seriously, I absolutely love this. To begin with, your detail is phenomenal and it captured me right away. I think I have maybe read one or two other stories with this amount of detail and they are truly the best one's. Your plot is ridiculously original and I would honestly consider taking it down so no one will steal it and you can make a book out of it! Then again I love it so don't do that...

I can tell you really take your time with each chapter and you don't rush into anything. One of my biggest problems is wanting to get a chapter out and rushing through it. Definitely keep at the pace your at even if it takes a little longer to let out a new chapter; it's worth it.

So suggestions:

I would definitely spell out numbers rather than just saying 1 or 5. Unless your number is 3,456,792,003 spell it out! I know I forget sometimes too but if you can, especially if it's a small number I'd spell it. Again, if it's a crazy number like 1,234 go ahead and type it like that but if it's 1,000 I would say one thousand. Same thing with time; if it's 5:00, write five o'clock. But if it's 7:22 go ahead and just write 7:22. Again, that's just a preference but I try to write it out.

The only other thing is going from the prologue to the first chapter confused me just a bit. I think for the prologue you should say day 27 or whatever day it is so when you flip to the first chapter and it says day 26 we know you are going back in time.

Other than that I truly love your story and I've subscribed! Keep writing or you'll kill me!

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