Author's Note

rate: 5

Okay, to begin, let's talk about all of the many authors. I really, really think, for any story that it's a bad idea to have that many authors. If you do have that many authors you literally need to sit down with everyone and come up with a plan on how exactly the story is going to take place. I know when I write my plans change sometimes. With this many authors you don't have that flexibility. Not only that but everyone has different writing styles. I can definitely tell there are big differences with each chapter and it's vital to have consistency when writing.

With that said, I think there are things to work on for different sections. I'm not sure which sections are yours but here is what I have so far:

1. In chapter one everything is rushed, and I mean rushed. I know exactly what happened but give me some detail. You gave me a small summary. She sees Niall, gets nervous, runs to the back. Her sister shows up from tour, surprises her sister and introduces her to the boys. Bam, that's all. Tell me what the cafe looks like, what is Alice like? She's absolultely adorable in the picture but how does she walk? What does she sound like? All of these things are important because with out them you are just giving my a summary. This chapter is what you say to someone who wants to know what happened during the chapter.

2. In chapter three, I am given lyrics to a WHOLE song. I don't want all the lyrics. Maybe a few here and there but it's unnecessary to throw them all out there. Also, I believe it's chapter four, you are telling me exactly what happened in chapter one except it's from someone else's point of view. If you want to do that, the best thing to do is put it in the same chapter or just simply give us her thoughts on what happened rather than the full dialogue.

3. Sentence structure and spelling are fine with really no mistakes but I would italicize the lyrics if you are going to write them out. The way you have Little Things written is fine but chapter three lyrics is way too much.

I would brush up on those things if you are going to continue. I know it's hard but I would definitely consider not having so many authors because it just gets messy.

*ALSO: DO NOT, and I repeat, do not ask for characters! Asking for a co-writer is one thing but you need to think of your characters yourself. It's your imagination and you should come up with those things. If anything, base your descriptions off of the character list on your summary page.

Hopefully this helped and I'll try to do your other stories as well!
Any questions? Messages are welcome!

Notes

Sorry it's taken so long, I've been very busy!