rate: 8.5
grammar: great
idea: =

This story is pretty good but I feel like it's going very slowly. Each chapter is a different character so instead of getting a few characters in the same chapter I'm having to wait for someone else's POV even if it might not be necessarry (hopefully that makes sense). For example, we may not need to know Sami's POV because it's not as important as Valentine's POV at the moment....that's just an example.

Umm, grammar is great and the idea is okay but it seems like there isn't much of a plot. I haven't read all of it so I can't say there isn't a plot completely but I think you should try to get to the point a little quicker instead of giving everyone's POV for each scene.

Hopefully that helped and if you message me I'll be more than happy to answer any other questions!

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