rate: I'm not going to rate yet because it only has one chapter
grammar: great
idea: =

I've heard multiple storied with the whole alley way thing but I do think it's a little different since it isn't the band as the bad guys. Your grammar is great just like your other story and it seems like it'll be interesting as long as you add some twists. Make sure it isn't exactly the as your other story considering Harry is saving her like your first.....that's perfectly fine but the plot should be much different!

The only thing I think that you need to watch is the realistic aspects again. If she's going to faint, make her get stabbed somewhere she will actually faint. Her arm may make her hurt or bleed but she won't faint that quickly. Also, if she's hiding behind the boys, how does she get hurt. Detail is key!

It's great so far and if I had to give it a rate based off of just this it would probably be between a 9-9.5

good job!

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