rate: 8.8
grammar: great
idea: +

Great idea, it's very original. Your grammar is pretty awesome too! The only thing I really saw was that you are spelling 'apologize' wrong. You're using an 's' instead of a 'z'. I don't know where you are from so maybe you spell it differently....like I think people in the UK spell 'color' with a U- 'colour' (I could be wrong, but yeah, haha).

I feel like a lot of it has been rushed and some parts are a little unrealistic. For example, there is no way Liam could give her detention. Even if he did I'm sure she would just laugh about it and not go. When John says that he loves her I find that strange as well. I guess he is drunk, it's just a little forward. However, it is a fictional story so you choose how it happens!

Like I said, great idea, great grammar, just don't rush too much or make it too unrealistic.

Hope this helped!

Notes

Sorry it took a while, I've been busy with my other stories!
Happy New Years!