rate: 10
idea/originality: +
grammar: great!
advice: 2

I have no idea why you thought this story sucks because I love it! The amount of detail makes me feel like I'm there and that is something I always want. You're grammar was nearly perfect and I love the idea. It could be similar to other stories but the way you've set it up, it's extremely original. I think it's funny and I'm excited for the rest of it. DETAIL DETAIL DETAIL....it gets me every time!

1. I honestly can't think of anything except stop telling yourself it sucks because it's actually very good.

2. Unlike others, I like the chapters being shorter but I do think if you're going to do that try to write two chapters rather than one in a day.

Great story and you have gained a new subscriber!