rate: 9.8
idea/originality: +
grammar: great
advice: 1

I love the idea of this story! It's really awesome and different. I liked the 3rd person, however, I haven't read any of your other stuff yet so I can't tell you which I like better. Overall great job and I'm really excited to keep reading!

1. I was a little confused at first with what was going on but when I read your note everything made a lot more sense!

Sorry I don't have too much to say it was just really good!