Author's Note

Hello love,

I finished reading Bits and Pieces so here is your review!

Well you had me hooked from the first chapter! A lot of the time I'll read the first 3-4 chapters of a story and know exactly what I'm in for but I didn't really want to stop reading. It really helped that your punctuation, grammar, and spelling was great but I don't really judge that anyway. It just helped!

Now detail is very important and I think you did a great job incorporating that, especially during and after dialogue. That's something that you should always have because it explains what the character is doing so you don't have to come straight out and say she was happy, rather than: she couldn't wipe the smile off her face. You did a really great job with that!

I'd say the only detail you should work on is the outfit. Don't get in the habit of saying "and this is what she wore". I want you to explain to me what she wore as if the picture wasn't there. It's fine to put it there but I want to know what it looks like.

Really the only other thing I would look at is how fast her and Zayn get to know each other. It seems like they meet and all of a sudden they act like they've known each other forever. I would maybe say *2 months later*. Just something that lets us know that they are comfortable with each other; especially in high school. Those were always the awkward years (at least for me) so staying the night and stuff like that probably wouldn't be mentioned yet.

Other than that I think it's really great and you have something going for you! Keep it up!

-A

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