Author's Note

Well, that was probably the most interesting thing I have ever read.

I don't really know where to start but it kind of reminded me of X-factor when Simon makes one of his weird yet really good metaphors. I don't think that makes sense but let me try to explain...

Unique is an understatement. I literally have never read another story like this and the idea is great. When I read the first chapter I was like wow this story has so much detail, so much depth, and I can't wait for the next chapter. Then I really enjoyed the letter. It was meaningful and I felt like I could feel her anger. Next chapter was another letter. And then another, then another. I was waiting and waiting for Harry to come back so we could hear his perspective but it never happened. That's where I'd like to give you some thought.

The letters are brilliant- really. I'd love to see more dialogue and interaction with the characters though. If Harry is receiving these letters, what is he feeling? You say he is kissing a girl who hits him. I want to see that from his perspective! Why did she do that? Who is that girl? And maybe he sends her a letter back? I think it would be pretty cool to see their letters go back and forth if you want your whole story to be letters. And definitely put the date on each letter.

So you know I love the letters but another thing I'd think about is what she's writing. She's saying how much she hates him for so long and then she starts saying how much she loves him. She's very wish-washy and it's gives me whip lash. I think that's where we need interaction outside of the letters. If we can see what she's feeling in her daily life, when she writes the letter we will understand more.

I think my main focus is that you have soooo much potential. Your first two chapters were like, "wow I absolutely love this". After that I wanted more than the letters. I wanted to feel her heart break and feel his pain as he read each one.

The last and only thing I would really think about doing is changing the title. The only reason for this is that it won't attract everyone. I'm not saying to take it out of your letters because that is important but the title is what pulls your readers in. Unfortunately, people do first judge the book by it's cover and in this case, they will judge your story by its title. Just a thought.

I really hope this helped. Again, I love this idea and its unlike anything I've ever read. The good thing is nothing has to be changed, just add a few more chapters with dialogue and their every day life! I promise you'll get more subscribers that way!

-A

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