A Book Review
Behind the Masks (Part One)
Rating: 4
First, I don't know how to critique one chapter. That's really when you're introducing characters, and nothing interesting happens. So, I put a little "Part One" up at the top because I want you to come back to me after you've got at least five or more chapters, okay? That rating of 4 is extremely guessed, and I almost gave you a two because I wasn't sure what to think of your writing yet. But based off of what I read, you're doing a good job.
So far, your grammar is great! And that's always a relief for me. The teacher-student relationship type stories appear quite often, so I'm hoping you'll throw in a few surprises. Right now, it's the typical "our eyes connected" and "he's cute for a teacher" and "I shouldn't be having these feelings towards him". PLEASE don't go down the Pretty Little Liars path. I'm putting faith in you!
Maybe you can make it like a love triangle? Maybe make it even more forbidden and wrong, and make her dad's best mate be interested in her. And you know who the best mate could be? Niall, Liam, Louis, or Zayn. Possibly make one of them be like mortal enemies with Harry or something. So it's a huge love triangle that's completely wrong because they are all older guys. Go ahead and use that idea, babe, because I sure am interested and seeing that one play out.
Do continue, I will be watching your story and seeing it progress. Do come back to me after a few chapters so I can give it a solid review. Hope this helps!
~M
First, I don't know how to critique one chapter. That's really when you're introducing characters, and nothing interesting happens. So, I put a little "Part One" up at the top because I want you to come back to me after you've got at least five or more chapters, okay? That rating of 4 is extremely guessed, and I almost gave you a two because I wasn't sure what to think of your writing yet. But based off of what I read, you're doing a good job.
So far, your grammar is great! And that's always a relief for me. The teacher-student relationship type stories appear quite often, so I'm hoping you'll throw in a few surprises. Right now, it's the typical "our eyes connected" and "he's cute for a teacher" and "I shouldn't be having these feelings towards him". PLEASE don't go down the Pretty Little Liars path. I'm putting faith in you!
Maybe you can make it like a love triangle? Maybe make it even more forbidden and wrong, and make her dad's best mate be interested in her. And you know who the best mate could be? Niall, Liam, Louis, or Zayn. Possibly make one of them be like mortal enemies with Harry or something. So it's a huge love triangle that's completely wrong because they are all older guys. Go ahead and use that idea, babe, because I sure am interested and seeing that one play out.
Do continue, I will be watching your story and seeing it progress. Do come back to me after a few chapters so I can give it a solid review. Hope this helps!
~M
can you please review and rate The mentally brave please?
Thank you =)
1/23/14