A Book Review
Dollhouse
Rating: 4
Description : So basically, this little girl has a dollhouse and creepy shit starts to happen. I honestly don't really know how to describe it, you'll just have to read.
So. I am actually one of your subscribers, girl! Your plot is simply fascinating yet completely terrifying all at once. Woman, what kind of sick mind do you have?! Don't take that the wrong way, thank god for your sick mind because then we wouldn't have this story!
Who would've thought of a dollhouse that like has real doll people, and I just don't even know. It's an interesting idea and I am in awe of how you came up with it.
My only complaints is that your grammar isn't the best. The "I"s are supposed to be capitalized and sometimes you use words in the wrong context. Try reading it out loud to make sure it sounds right, okay? That always helps me. Or if you're unsure, get someone to edit it for you. Hell, I'd even be willing! Just message me and I'll help ya!
Also, you are descriptive, but sometimes in the wrong places. I can't point out specific areas, but all I can say is focus in on the atmosphere of the scene. Is it freaky? Lovey or cutesy? Happy? Depressed? Your goal is to make the reader feel like they are there. If it's a creepy scene, I want it to a point where I can't sleep or turn the light out. If it's lovey then I don't want to stop giggling and freaking out over something stupid. Damn hormones...
I hope this helped, do continue because I am fascinated with it.
~M
Description : So basically, this little girl has a dollhouse and creepy shit starts to happen. I honestly don't really know how to describe it, you'll just have to read.
So. I am actually one of your subscribers, girl! Your plot is simply fascinating yet completely terrifying all at once. Woman, what kind of sick mind do you have?! Don't take that the wrong way, thank god for your sick mind because then we wouldn't have this story!
Who would've thought of a dollhouse that like has real doll people, and I just don't even know. It's an interesting idea and I am in awe of how you came up with it.
My only complaints is that your grammar isn't the best. The "I"s are supposed to be capitalized and sometimes you use words in the wrong context. Try reading it out loud to make sure it sounds right, okay? That always helps me. Or if you're unsure, get someone to edit it for you. Hell, I'd even be willing! Just message me and I'll help ya!
Also, you are descriptive, but sometimes in the wrong places. I can't point out specific areas, but all I can say is focus in on the atmosphere of the scene. Is it freaky? Lovey or cutesy? Happy? Depressed? Your goal is to make the reader feel like they are there. If it's a creepy scene, I want it to a point where I can't sleep or turn the light out. If it's lovey then I don't want to stop giggling and freaking out over something stupid. Damn hormones...
I hope this helped, do continue because I am fascinated with it.
~M
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1/23/14