The Silence That Surrounds - Comments, page 6

@VanitySorrowHeart
He was exactly like he was when it was Sophia's pov. I think you lost a few readers because of they can't handle how realistic this story is. If anything, they should be thankful that someone has the decency to write something so.close to.real life. Also because of the lack of romance like every other story on this site. They just have to realize that not everything have to be romantic. Life is not a big happy ending!

@coffeeandtea

lol but I still have a good 20 chapters left for this book! :-P haha writing it as fast as I can but I think you'll like the next part :-) I just need to find a picture of her brother dylan...it's hard going through pics especially when I have a pic clearly already in mind. But yay, glad you liked it!

OH.MY.GOODNESS. I LOVED IT! I LOVED IT! I LOVED IT! I CAN'T EVEN SAY WHAT I'M FEELING! OH MY GOSH! I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE SECOND BOOK!

@LIZZY THAT GIRL

lol glad you liked it - I lost a few more readers tonight so I wasn't sure if I made him like I had been during sophia's pov or not that was my concern.

Holy shit!

@coffeeandtea

once I wake up a little I'll be getting to work on it tonight haha So - tomorrow or Tuesday :-)

OMG!! I can't Wait for chapter 20! Do you know when you are going to post it?

@coffeeandtea

Aw thank you! Chapter 20 is going back into real time! Harry's POV, very excited!

@VanitySorrowHeart
I will definitely enjoy this book! And the title is super catchy! I like it! Plus thats such a unique way to start a book!

@coffeeandtea

lol no, it will be continuing on to the 2nd book but I started in the middle so there's def a lot more happening to this one. There will be a sequel it will be called: The Silence That Surrounds: Echo of Screams - catchy, huh? Def still a lot happening in the silence that surrounds for both Sophhia and the boys. I hope more than anything you enjoy!

OMG I freaking love this story! I freaked out when you updated. But I love the chapters! The emotions of everyone really made sense now. Especially Harry's. You're beginning character was amazing, I'm hoping that that isn't how the story ends

@Anwyn

sounds good! I'm working on chapter 18 - slow but sure tonight/early morning for sure. :-)

hey! thanks for your comment.. well, really long comment :) let me message you later today..

@Anwyn

Holy crap, you really did get inside the story. You pretty much just summed it out perfectly. I love that it's getting into the reader's mind because then the story and world sort of unfold there. I don't always do realism like the hostage and the wanted aren't realistic - some of it but not 100% which is okay but this one I really wanted to push the envelope and do it from start to finish as 100% believable. Which, come the 2nd book I will add another hostage (sneak view inside my mind for the 2nd book without giving anything away) his name will be Asher Heart and he will have a brother Ashley Heart) he will be a musician and he will be a hostage. It's going to be a pretty plotable story. But you are right, he doesn't want to get attached and he doesn't want another punishment - he's stuck. Even if he killed his father and the gangs around the sector...he has nothing else really to go for or get back to, which, writing that just makes me depressed for him. I'll play with the idea on getting more information in the next story for sure! We still have a little bit to go in this one though!

Right now Sophia is telling her story but in the next 3 chapters I am bringing it back into real time - or the next two really. Yeah the next two, 3rd one will open with Harry's POV as we left the story from the middle since I still need to fill in the blanks.

lol! Stockholm for me is so much different. in perspective...the stories I've read where 1D kidnaps these women and brutally rapes them and hits them...and they come to accept and like it, I just...if someone took my innocence, I would and could never forgive them. I couldn't even like them, I would loathe and try poisoning their food or drinks every time chance presented itself (I just read a story where this girl gets raped and abused then they're nice to her and Harry suddenly feels bad for treating her that way out of the blue but he still expects her to cook for them, that's what I meant lol) If you know any good kidnapping stories, let me know I've been dying to read a few!

I can see a chance where it's possible for Harry to open up the door a crack but 2nd book would be better suited to the idea I had for it. We'll see! I have no direction, I write each chapter out of my head and post. I've lost a few readers because they were expecting it to be bad boy and good girl type thing - but that's alright, 'm happy for however many readers I have for the story, whether it's 2 or 20. I'm excited to give people more of the story. Since I'm going out tomorrow, I'm working on chapter 18 now. Should be posted in a few hours or so.

Harry will come into his own if I go with the idea...well, Asher's gonna be quite the interesting one too lol I'm very excited to write what's going to happen. I'll think on the scnerios for Harry though because even if she hates him - I don't see her not trying to get through to Louis or Harry. I don't see them becoming friends, there will always be a sort of hostage/captor relationship between the two but I think I see what you mean on the non-romantic side of things. I did have a few subtle ideas for it.

What's so interesting in other people's fics, is, I also noticed that they never mention going to the bathroom or never getting their period and I won't leave that kinda comment asking stuff like that so I sort of wanted to present Sophia with this realism - like, I needed her and the others to be real to make the story real. What's so interesting is a lot of women view it as something disgusting even though we have them and it's never mentioned. I've always found it non-personal because it's normal and natural. I agree 100%. Harry wasn't bothered by it, I believe he's said in an interview at one point something referencing it. I don't know though, I did some research and didn't find this interview so may of just been a fan making something up or a fake article lol but I agree and that's why I wanted to write that scene. I love how the other boys were a bit more hands off on that one and just let Harry deal with it as nothing would have phased him, he's def a strong male character in that respect and another girl just told me she was on hers when she read that chapter and she says she never felt more humiliated then just picturing that. It was horrific for her but that's why I wrote this, to not exactly escape reality just - bring some light into it.

Sophia right now is just a job but I think given time I might dip my foot into different pools and see which one is right while still remaining true to the story, have to wait and see :-) who knows what direction I will take down the road but I totally know what you mean on him being a monster and he will def be coming up in his pov in a few chapters!

Also, I can talk for hours and hours on writing so it's not boring to me what so ever lol message anytime if you have a question or whatnot I'm around I check here daily a few times.

Thanks so much for reading! I hope you enjoy the next part!

hey, thanks for your response.. it's always interesting to have "a peak into a writer's head" and get a picture of their writting process.. see, I like that your stories are realistic. I also love that Sophia is a strong female character! It was a great idea to show how Harry and Louis got mixed up in this sort of business..Harry's memory was so sad and it makes sense now why Harry is so emotionless and hard toward Sophia.. he protects himself from emotions and any sort of possitive attachment with the hostages.. (as he tries to avoid the same fiasco that happened with that little baby girl..) he wants to spear his feelings, he doesn't want to get emotionally involved with anyone else, so he won't be hurt again and woudn't blame himself in case something bad happens to that person because of their relationship.. And also, he protect his hostages in order to avoid another possible punishment that would happened to them if he got emotionally involved with them and attached.. am I right? (does it make sense? :) ) after what happened to him as a boy, no wonder he is distant.. On the other hand, (for me, personally) it would be interesting to see him getting closer with Sophie (not romantically - even thought I'm still hoping for a Stockholm syndrom fairytale, don't laught at me.. I'm a sucker for a bad boy falls in love type of stories) I can imagine that he can find comforting to spend time with someone who is not part of a gang and whose mind is pure and not spoiled.. it can be his espace from reality.. his hideout.. it can remind him what it's like to be a human instead of a monster.. you know what I mean.. Also, it would be great to read some chapters or passages from his point of view.. I'm interested in what he thinks about Sophia. Is she only a job for him? And one more thing.. I found particully realistic was when Sophia was on her period.. it's something so natural but it's always missing in stories, most probably because it's considered to be something dirty that does not meets the criteria of "kidnapping romance" stories.. anyway, I stop boring you here :D Thanks for the story and can't wait for another chapter.. :)

Aw, thank you so much! I don't think I'd ever get published by a book company, I'm really modest in my writing, anything I write I always find some fault with in my head but I always did have a dream/ goal to have a book/something published one day and I would definitely let you know if that goal/dream ever comes true! But your words really mean a lot! I love that you're really liking the story, I love writing it and talking with readers to see what I can do to improve or their thoughts in general but the story will cap at the 2nd story, if I tried to squeeze it all on this story alone, I'd have about 80 chapters and most people wouldn't give it a chance after completion because it would be so long so I'm adding a sub plot to it while one thing is going on, another thing is going on and connecting it to one big conclusion. I know I need to get back into real time...people want me to do a pov from the boys, man, I sure hope I don't disappoint. lol but I bring them their own voice from their pov so I guess it won't be too bad!

Sorry I ramble on a story lol. I think a lot of people were expecting a romance aspect from it when they started reading but I've always been 100% honest with readers and let them know that, after all Sophia has gone through with these boys, her connections realistically - like, if this story was put in a real life scenario, I don't think as a person she could forgive any of them for what she's been put through. Niall, Zayn - possibly Liam, she can try to find some comfort in at later chapters but Louis and Harry are just way too far bled out, I see her trying to make a connection/effort to find some solace within these two but...Harry and Louis are set in their own ways. Zayn and Niall, I haven't gone too far into their heads but Niall is subtly reaching out but romance wise, I dunno I don't know if I see it or not. I see her having more emotions with another captive then the boys...but I don't have anything mapped out, story can go either way! I just have to follow the realism aspect because on any given page you can read a 1D romance kidnapping story but after awhile, it's the same plot, I crave to read something like this that's not my own writing lol but it truly means the world to me that you and others are reading and enjoying it!

@VanitySorrowHeart
I have a strong feeling that I will be reading the sequel. weather there is one sequel or 400 I will still read it because it is that amazing! Yeah it's very close to.real life. It's unfortunate that this.stuff really happens in real.life. I have to admit I was hoping for it to be romantic and didn't expect for any of this to.happen, but as I kept reading, I got addicted and loved it even.more! This is the closest to a real life story I've ever read and I've longed for a story like this! You are a truly talented person and if you were a famous author, I would buy all your books. You're amazing!

@LIZZY THAT GIRL

Thank you so much! I am so happy you're enjoying it! Honestly? I write this story as I go along, no mapouts as of yet and I just write what comes to me with each chapter. The idea came from realizing a lot of girls write a kidnapping but they write it in the stockholm point of view kidnapper takes girl, kidnapper treats girl bad, girl falls for kidnapper, they marry or they run away together...I needed - no, I craved realism. I wanted to read a story where it wasn't a romance - where it was real. I love a good romance kidnapped story but I like a little bit of realism too and the response to this has been so amazing! A lot of people love the different take and it means the world to me people love the story and are reading!

Sadly, it happens everyday and I needed something powerful to get the reader to see why he was the way he was. He gave up when he couldn't escape. The father killed his mother and made sure all hope of leaving died with her and to see so vividly into his past for me was heartbreaking to write as it was for some readers to read.

Thanks so so much for taking the time to read, vote and comment it truly means a lot! I love feedback, good or bad :-) there will be a sequel (in the 2nd book things progress further) to the silence that surrounds - I hope you finish enjoying this one and will join me on an adventure on the next one!

this story is amazing. How did you think of this? Incredible. Honestly, I cried when Harry told his story. Oh my gosh it was very descriptive and depressing. I hope nothing like that ever happens to any child- or anyone for that matter.

@Anwyn

Oh! and thank you so much for reading! I did want you to know that there will be a sequel to the silence that surrounds. I'm really excited about it! So I hope you enjoy and can't wait for you to read the next one!