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The Donation by abygail.bauman
Title: The Donation
Author: abygail.baumnan
Overall Rating: 8.9
Review:
The Donation, a Harry Styles Fanfiction, is one of the most original stories I've read on this website. It didn't feel cliche, or predictable. The story follows the lead protagonist; Penelope Van Oppen, an F.B.I. agent who's come to decide that she'd like to start a family.
It isn't the typical fanfiction, because unlike most stories, the main characters actually meet via artificial insemination. Though this story is only four chapters in (plus a prologue), there's already heavy tension between the characters, and I can tell this story is really going somewhere.
As far as grammar goes, it wasn't bad. Actually, I thought the story had a nice flow to it. Though, there are some parts that could use a bit of editing. The author doesn't always state who's talking, and sometimes you have to use common sense to figure it out, other times it can still be a bit confusing.
Other than that, I can't see anything wrong with the story. Harry is as charming as usual, and Penelope is an independent, and sweet leading lady. I think it's a good match, if I do say so myself.
Author: abygail.baumnan
Overall Rating: 8.9
Review:
The Donation, a Harry Styles Fanfiction, is one of the most original stories I've read on this website. It didn't feel cliche, or predictable. The story follows the lead protagonist; Penelope Van Oppen, an F.B.I. agent who's come to decide that she'd like to start a family.
It isn't the typical fanfiction, because unlike most stories, the main characters actually meet via artificial insemination. Though this story is only four chapters in (plus a prologue), there's already heavy tension between the characters, and I can tell this story is really going somewhere.
As far as grammar goes, it wasn't bad. Actually, I thought the story had a nice flow to it. Though, there are some parts that could use a bit of editing. The author doesn't always state who's talking, and sometimes you have to use common sense to figure it out, other times it can still be a bit confusing.
Other than that, I can't see anything wrong with the story. Harry is as charming as usual, and Penelope is an independent, and sweet leading lady. I think it's a good match, if I do say so myself.
Sorry if I asked too much! I know it’s super long!
4/25/18