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Okay, here is the shit. Your story IChat is good. There are however, a few things that I didn’t think were so great. For starters, the cover. I thought the cover was kind of boring. Just a random pic of the guys. Do you know how many stories on this site have a one direction pic as their cover? You want your cover to stand out and actually relate to your story rather than just throw a few emojis in there and be done with it.

I like the theme. I like how you have the messages like IChat. However I think that you do it too much. I think that it would have been so good if you did IChat conversations every two or three chapters to continue the theme but I don’t think that the whole story should’ve been IChat messages. This is mainly because you can’t add any detail like “Oh.My.God. everyone, Harry smiled” you know what I mean. You can’t add detail and depth to the content which kind of makes it boring and annoying.

I get that some of the grammar and spelling was purposely wrong because you were saying it like teenagers would which I like, however, quite a few times you misspelt the names like “Lpuis Tomlinson” and “Harrry shitface styles”.

Overall, I think IChat is a good story. I especially like the idea of IChat conversations since practically everyone is on social media but I think it could have been executed a little better. I have never read a story like this before so be glad that it is unique and different which, again, I like. Other people will like it too but I think people are more likely to click on your story if you make your cover and summary more interesting. Keep updating because I am now dying to know what happened to Louis and Hazel.
~ Sophalicious

DEAR ALL PEOPLE
IChat is a good story. I would rate it a 5 1/2 /10 and recommend it to anyone unless they are a Justin Bieber fan cause this story portrays him in a way in which you may get offended.

Notes

Here is another review. Thankyou to everyone who has asked me to review their stories!
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Love you all
~Sophalicious