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Okay here is the shit. Your story We Took A Chance is good. I think Niall and Zoe are really cute together. I can really relate to Zoe’s character, afraid of love, built up walls, always surprised that Niall wants to hang out with her. You have written her well and you can easily tell her personality through the way she speaks and acts.

I never knew where it was going which is good because you wouldn’t want it to be predictable because then it gets boring. In the beginning I was kind of like “This is confusing, where is this going” but after reading a few chapters I totally understood and I think the last few especially are amazing.

My only critique would be that it takes a really long time t get into the important drama/action part of the story. Niall doesn’t even appear until the third or fourth chapter so I kinda feel like everything else before that is kind of meaningless and unimportant extra information that you don’t need. I get that you need a chapter to explain the backstory and why the character acts like they do but it does take a really long time to build up into the action.

Overall I think it is a really cute story. I love how Niall acts around Zoe, he always rants and stutters, it’s adorable. I also think that their first kiss is really cute. The whole story just makes me go “awwwww” and smile. The grammar is great and the events are well sequenced and easy to follow. It’s not perfect but I think that this story could and will be really great if you continue to update and continue the level of drama.
~Sophalicious

DEAR OTHER PEOPLE
This story is good. I would definitely recommend it, especially for a Niall lover. This story is great for whenever you fell sad as it never fails to make me smile. I would rate it 7 1/2 /10. You should check it out!

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