Covers & Reviews

Characters- 8/10

I can’t say that I care for Harry much. He seems gratuitous and I don’t know what makes him so allegedly dangerous but there are little quirks about Sam that I like. Of course a goody goody isn’t going to fight so of course she’s going to “attack” him with a pillow out of surprise XD that part made me giggle.

Summary- 8/10

Obviously the summary introduces us to the characters but I feel like there could be a little more background info, especially considering the “price” that’s insinuated in the blurb. Make me want to know what price has to be paid so I know whether or not I want to bid. And points for trigger/ language warnings and crediting your cover artist (wink wink, Kaleigh)

Grammar- 7/10

There are a few spelling mistakes but what’s reeeally getting me are the run on sentences with only commas for pauses. Semi colons and periods are equally good ;D

Formatting- 10/10

Paragraphs are neatly spaced and begin where they should :)

Plot- 9/10

I can’t say I’ve seen any TRUE stalker stories on here. Unfortunately, stalkers don’t tend to make instant contact with their target. They wait, they learn, they might send letters or try catching their eye at a coffee shop. There’s some sort of indirect contact initiated before physical contact. Otherwise, I’m curious about what made him pick her and what’s going to happen.

Overall- 8.4/10

There’s a lot of potential here but I feel like you’re not going as in depth as you could be. Why is Harry dangerous? What’s going to happen to Sam? Who are his rivals and what threat do they pose to the duo? With the popularity of dark Harry stories, I’d recommend this because stalking is a new subject when compared to the whole kidnapped-and-made-my-favourite-sex-slave thing but run with it. Stalkers have weird mentalities. If you want some characterization ideas, I recommend looking up some stalker-top-ten lists on YouTube. What do they share in common and what methods do they typically use? Apply that to Harry and I think it will greatly strengthen his character AND the story itself :)

Questions/Comments-

+ Why is she describing her appearance?

+ What kind of lip piercing? What kind of nose piercing? Helps with description :)

+ Personal peeve, but Polyvore feels lazy. Feel free to describe the outfit with words :)

+ DON’T TRUST HIS FRIENDS. HOW DO YOU KNOW THEY’RE HIS FRIENDS? (in regards to Sam being totally hunky dory with Louis)

Notes

Hopefully this helps with your writing :D

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