Story Reviews

Overall rating 7/10

So I did like this story, I read it all in one sitting but there are some slight things that I think you could improve on I'll start with the best things

I liked most of the characters so good character development

I liked your style of writing it was unique and appealing to me as a reader to continue to find out

Again if you dont mind me saying this was a storyline typically used on this website but you brought your own kind of edge to it *if you get what I'm trying to say* :)

This isn't usually my type of story but its quite an achievement from you as a writer that I fully read something I usually would not :)

Okay so the points to improve on:

I say this alot, I as a reader I dont know it might just be me find it hard to read chunky paragraphs, my eyes just get blurred and I get distracted really easily, I would prefer to have a story broken down into smaller more readable chunks (this could also work really well with your story for parts of impact or drama) of course you dont have to do this just a suggestion :)

From what I read punctuation and spelling are quite good overall :)

I did enjoy this story so I would recommend it just hoping that you carry on with the touches of originality that bring this story alive :)

Thanks
Jen x

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