Story Reviews

My third time writing this because of my internet!

Ok, so the story has a promising start, Erin the 'bad' rich girl is being forced by her parents to have counselling for her 'problems' when she goes to meet the counsellor she meets other troubled teen, Michael and they immediately bond (this is where my problem with the story starts) okay so yes, they like each other, but why does Erin tell her counsellor just days after she that she thinks shes in love...come on!

If I am being brutally honest I didnt find the storyline very interesting, it was a tad cliche and nothing of real substance was really happening! Its not that your writing style is bad, the storyline just isnt very interesting! A plot twist, a new character or some drama would have been nice or even so humour to shake things up a little!

There was some improvent in Luke & Skylars part however but the points I made for improvement still apply, these characters need to feel real not plastic! I mean none of this in a hating way, I just feel like this could be a good story if alterations are made x

Spelling is all good, a tip for structure is to ditch the chunky text and stucture instead in smaller paragraphs, it makes reading easier!

Hope this helped!

I wouldnt reccomend at moment because I feel like changes need to be made first x
Overall rating: 5/10

Much love x

Notes

So my ratings have dropped :( I just want you all to know I put in a lot of time to read all yoir stories, you know my waiting list is a mile long! Instead of leaving a low rating if youre not happy with your review please instead leave a comment explaining why! I will answer!