The Princess, The Straight-A Student, The Gang, And The Blue Hills At Sunset

Please keep on writing your story because it's really good

@Call_Me_Godot
Thank you for the tips I will definitely take them into consideration. BTW I was up late last night writing this so not all of it came out exactly how I wanted it to. So again thank you for the tips.
-IHeartBrittNicole236-

I think throwing French in there is really cool but Sylvie and Olivia's conversation is a bit formal. Instead of bonjour or au revoir, you could've gone with salut. And typically using vous verbs is something you do respectfully, like talking to adults or someone who holds more authority over you or when you're speaking to a stranger. Parlez-vous francais was the right thing to ask Louis as Oliva doesn't know him personally but she'd ask Sylvie parles francais?

Its just like you'd ask a stranger hello how are you but you'd ask your best friend hey what's up. :P