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The Princess, The Straight-A Student, The Gang, And The Blue Hills At Sunset

Chapter 10: Forgiven

Zayn's P.O.V.
"Oh my god, Harry! Like I would do something like this!" I practiacally yelled. I heard a deep sigh. I looked down and saw Olivia had fainted. "Olivia? Olivia! Please wake up! Someone call 911!" I said. I set Liv down and checked her pulse. "How is she?" Sylvie asked. "Bad but alive." I replied. "There's an ambulance on the way right now." Liam said. I said nothing, just nodded. 'Keep it together, Zayn,' I thought. "Liam, Louis!" I said. "Yeah?" "Get everyone loaded in. We're going to follow the ambulance when they arrive. Now!" I demanded. Everyone piled into the vehclies just as the ambulance pulled up. In less than two minutes, Liv was in the ambulance and we were following her. After like fifteen minutes - which seemed like forever - we arrived at the hospital. We all ran in and asked what room she was in. "Room 253." The lady at the desk said. "Thank you." I said. We couldn't see her right away so we waited in the waiting room. I was really nervous about Liv. After about 45 minutes to an hour, the doctor came out. "All for Olivia Thomas." He called. Me, the boys, Sylvie and Eleanor walked over to him. He gave us a confused look. "You're all family?" He asked. "No, just me. They're her friends and my friends." "We can only allow family right now." I nodded and followed him to Olivia's room. "How is she?" "Not good. If I were you, I wouldn't get my hopes up about her survivng." He said, opening the door. Okay, can somebody stop me from not kicking this guy's tail? Glad I didn't say that out loud. I walked in and saw Olivia in a coma. That just made my heart sink. This was all my fault. I shouldn't have left her. If I didn't leave her, we would probably be traveling in the car to somewhere where I've wanted to take Liv for a while. I walked over to the bed and sat down in a chair. I just stared at her. Her face was so pale. I held her hand and rubbed it with my thumb. "I'm so sorry Olivia. I never should've left you alone. I'm so sorry." I whispered. But I know that she didn't hear me. I closed my eyes and had a vision. "Zayn, everything will be alright." I turned around and saw Olivia. "Olivia? I thought you were in a coma." I said. "I am. This is a vision. You have to trust God, Zayn. Everything will be alright." She said, fading away. "Olivia! Come back! Please!" I cried out. "Zayn, trust God!" She said. And with that she was gone. I opened my eyes. What did she mean by trust God? Just a recap, when my father died, I blamed God for it. For everything. I never told anyone else that. Olivia's words rang through my head. That's when I made a descion and got down on my knees and did something I never thought I would do again. I put my hands together and said, "God, I know I haven't said anything to you for a while. It wasn't your fault that my dad died. I am sorry for everything. Please forgive me." I hadn't even relized I was crying. Then I heard a voice say, "Zayn, you are forgiven." I knew right away that was God. I looked up at Olivia. "I'm so sorry, Olivia. For everything. For kidnapping you, overreacting, slapping you, leaving you alone. I'm so sorry, Liv. Please forgive me." "I forgive you, Zayn." She said.

Notes

Sorry for not updating in almost three weeks! I didn't have any inspiration but now I do! Yes, I believe in God and I'm proud of it. I hope you guys do too! See y'all later!
-IHeartBrittNicole236-

Comments

Please keep on writing your story because it's really good

Nutellaisbae Nutellaisbae
12/18/15

@Call_Me_Godot
Thank you for the tips I will definitely take them into consideration. BTW I was up late last night writing this so not all of it came out exactly how I wanted it to. So again thank you for the tips.
-IHeartBrittNicole236-

I think throwing French in there is really cool but Sylvie and Olivia's conversation is a bit formal. Instead of bonjour or au revoir, you could've gone with salut. And typically using vous verbs is something you do respectfully, like talking to adults or someone who holds more authority over you or when you're speaking to a stranger. Parlez-vous francais was the right thing to ask Louis as Oliva doesn't know him personally but she'd ask Sylvie parles francais?

Its just like you'd ask a stranger hello how are you but you'd ask your best friend hey what's up. :P