Reviews
Deadly
Hiya lovely I've been reading a couple chapter's of your story I'll give you my first impression.
The plot is good, its like any other kidnapping fanfic. I feel like your lacking in characters pov's (description wise)
For Iris I want to feel her pain and her grief. Like add a little fairy dust to make it amazing.
Like I said really the POV'S need to be more descriptive. And for your plot you always would want something different from other stories similar like yours. But overall its a good story <3 :)
Your Grammar is on point but you have a little mistakes here and there. But who cares were not perfect.
But it would be more enjoyable to be more in depth.
To make your story better
1) Be more descriptive
2) Grammar mistakes (but your on point :) )
3) Feeling in your writing
4)Be more creative with your story
Here's my review for your story :)
8/10
P.S. Sorry if I sounded like BITCH
Hey there love, it would mean the world to me if you could do a review on my story call, "Contrast between you and I." Thanks heaps lovely xxx
4/30/15