It's A Good Story But..
~Seduction~
It's A Alright Story But.. (3)
Grades:Cover : 6- What is it? I can't tell
Characters: 5- Funny Descriptions
Names: N/A - Doesn't Matter
Grammar & Mistakes : 5- Have A Few Mistakes. Try To Add More Detail. Also space out your dialogues :
Ex:
Wrong Way (I know you said you were tired, but you did this in other chapters)
L-Yeah babe?
A-Can we go clubbing for once?Together?
Right Way
"Yeah babe?" Luke says looking over at Abigail
"Can we go clubbing for once? Together?" Abigail says looking at the ground
Plot: Doesn't Matter.
If I enjoyed: I don't really read smutty stuff, But I did vote 10 :)
Hey love it would mean the world to me if you could do a review on my story call "Contrast between you and me." It's only two chapters long so far :) Thanks heaps love xxx
4/30/15