Hello @Liv_For_Payne!

I know I did skip ahead a couple stories to get to yours, but I saw someone comment that they loved it, so I just HAD to check it out!

You did a REALLY good job of writing this story! I love the detail, depth, intimate scenes, relationships between everyone, the be trail, and just how you play off all of the characters!

So, you said that you didn't know what to write anymore, so I've come up with some ideas maybe you could use:

1. Maybe make Harry start to have feelings for Hadley, and maybe she starts to have some for him. But not like they start dating, but maybe Harry starts to treat her a little bit better.
2. You could make Hadley's Dad or Brother comes and tries to save her. Like, one of them met Liam somehow, and Liam told him everything that happened. And maybe (I'm gonna give you two options if you would like to use this one) 1. Hadley doesn't want to go with her Dad or brother, because maybe she can't leave Harry because maybe she has some small feelings for him (tied to #1). 2. You could have her Dad or brother actually save her and she leaves with them, and then somehow Harry finds her and takes her back.
3. You could always add the other boys! (Zayn and Louis)
4. Maybe Harry moves Hadley to a different location, maybe in a total different country (Example: Japan, Italy, Germany, France, South Africa, Australia, Inndonesia, India, etc.)
5. You could also add any character that you want, like maybe Harry's ex-girlfriend, or maybe give Hadley a best friend, or bring her Brother or Dad back in (like in #2)
6. Maybe lay off the knife a little bit. I do realize that Harry is suppoesed ti be a cold-blooded murderer, but maybe lay off the whole 'cutting' thing just a bit. (I know this isn't really anything you can put in, and you totally DON'T have to do it, but it's just a suggestion:)

So, I REALLY think you should read this story, because it's actually kinda simillar to yours, but it's not the same:
Beautiful Monster - This is my ALL TIME favorite fan fiction. It's really well written, and they play everyone off really well....and it's REALLY popular ;)

This story really does look like it's going somewhere REALLY good. Keep up the A-W-E-S-O-M-E work!

Put a smile on your face,
and have a wonderful day lovely!
X, Chels

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