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"Stripper Secrets" Review
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Stripper Secrets
Grade: 7
The good things:
-Your idea for this story was just phenomenal, U-N-I-Q-U-E.
-Plot twists. I don’t want to ruin the story, but I never expected that to happen to Bonnie and Hallie. I was legit crying. I don’t cry often, because I am heartless, and don’t like people, so if a story can make me cry then wow.
Things to work on:
-I know you probably can’t change this because it’s such a large part of your plot, but I’m going to tell you anyway because I’m a brutally honest person and make children cry ((jk about the last part XD)) You went with the overused girl-has-an-amazing-unknown-singing-voice-and-ends-up-going-on-tour-with-one-
direction approach. It’s such an overused topic that it was kind of a turn off, and lowered your grade- a lot.
Would I recommend this story to someone else: Yesh :3
Stripper Secrets
Grade: 7
The good things:
-Your idea for this story was just phenomenal, U-N-I-Q-U-E.
-Plot twists. I don’t want to ruin the story, but I never expected that to happen to Bonnie and Hallie. I was legit crying. I don’t cry often, because I am heartless, and don’t like people, so if a story can make me cry then wow.
Things to work on:
-I know you probably can’t change this because it’s such a large part of your plot, but I’m going to tell you anyway because I’m a brutally honest person and make children cry ((jk about the last part XD)) You went with the overused girl-has-an-amazing-unknown-singing-voice-and-ends-up-going-on-tour-with-one-
direction approach. It’s such an overused topic that it was kind of a turn off, and lowered your grade- a lot.
Would I recommend this story to someone else: Yesh :3
Notes
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