Story Reviews

LIZZY THAT GIRL

Will I Ever See You Again?

Grade: 4

The good things:

-There’s a lot of dialogue in your story which gives more information on the character of the people in your story.

Things to work on:

-There are a lot of stories out there with similar plot ideas, so it wasn’t anything new for me. I’ve read a lot of stories with the same plot.

-The links to the outfit shouldn’t really be put directly into the chapter. Try describing the outfit, and then putting the link in the author’s note at the end. If you describe it well enough, the readers won’t even have to look at the link, the readers can create an image of the outfit because you’re descriptions are amazing.

-Along with that you should add more description to your writing. Describe the characters feelings, it will give your story more emotion, and will make it more interesting to read.

Would I recommend this story to someone else?: I don’t think so :(

Notes

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