Stupid fanfic moments

A/N: ok so i wanted to try something this is a short imagine from tumblr. (Not mentioning the auther for privacy reasons also because i can't remember who it is) so i read it and felt it had great potential... To be made fun of. So i just Comment on the story. (Again dont Want to offend anyone this is for entertainment if you love sarcasm as Much as i do.)
(my comments are in the (idk what their called))

“Hey give me that back” Niall said because you’re trying to hide his food (Why?)
and he found out so now you two are practically running around your shared flat with the boys.(shared flat with the boys? And none of Them Care about you two running around possibly ruinning their stuff?)
"No. I don’t want to” you said still being stubborn
“Come on… Hey!! Don’t eat that, don’t want to add more pounds do we??” he teased but it shot you harder than you’ve been expecting it to.
(Sings "every word that he says is a dagger in me" -les miserables) You’re practically living with the boys(practically? Didn't you just say you shared a flat? Or did i miss something here?) so you are immune to their teasing especially from Niall
(if you're immune Why did it hurt you?) even if you hate each other you didn’t expected that he’s gonna say that because he knew, everyone knew that being fat or called a fat is your biggest insecurity.
(Why would you tell the person you hate your BIGGEST insecurity? Thats just plain stupid.)
“So I’m that fat” you said tears threatening to fall.
“You know that’s not what I meant” he said still in a teasing manner(i refuse to believe that When you have tears in your eyes Niall would still be teasing) then you picked up your keys and left the flat. You know it’s nighttime so you picked up your speed not knowing someone is following you. (Because in this univers you can't feel someones presence and you can't hear footsteps or Breathing.)Suddenly someone grabbed you to a dark alley,
“Hey!!”
“Shut up Bitch!!!” a voice of a man said and you started crying.
(and no one saw or heard any of that? Even though it is Night the Streets dont just clear completely right? Also did this guy wait for her or what? The Streets are clearly empty but Then Why didn't she notice him? And if there not empty Then Why her? Why not some other Strange Girl?)
Then suddenly you heard a noise(hey she Can hear that would have been usefull before.), you saw the man on the ground with bleeding nose and Niall offering his hand so you can stand up.
“You okay??” he asked worriedly. ( uses two questionmarks so we know he means serious buisness)
“Yes, I’m fine. Why are you here??” you said still being bitter to him because of what he said to you earlier that got you into this mess.
“look I’m sorry… I really didn’t meant that…”(*mean that*)
“You know that’s my biggest insecurity… And I understand that you really hate me… Btw, thanks for saving me” you said (if you understand that he really hates you Why do you hang out? I avoid the people i hate at all Costs. (Looking at you Justin))
while walking past him but he stopped you
“What do you want now??”
“Y/N, I don’t hate you… In fact I really like you and I’m really sorry for saying that to you and for making myself a jerk in front of you” and you blushed crimson (Will return to fifthy shades of red after some short commercials.)
of what he just confessed at(to) you, you didn’t know what’s gotten into you but you immediately crashed your lips onto Niall(*Nialls* and your lips crashed onto Nialls? Last time i checked they we're human beings not cars.) and enjoyed this very night with your first boyfriend. (You kissed. When did you have the talk. As far as im concerned becoming boyfriend/girlfriend needs either to ask Will you be my ...? Like friends Can have one kiss and never speak of it again. If i instantly became boyfriend with a boy i kissed. I would have tons...wait no still none.)

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