Reviews with the Reader

First before I get to the review I just wanna say that it's good to be back reading and reviewing my fellow directioners stories again! Xoxo.

Now on to the review, this story was pretty damn good to be honest. There were minimal flaws and the plot was pretty intriguing. I would recommend this story to those that are comfortable with horror or intensity.

There were only a few flaws I found while reading your great story. Through out your story I found few grammar flaws such as: capitalization mistakes or misused comma. These things were hardly noticeable through out your story, and that deserves a major gold star!

Also at the start of your story I was a little confused about the blog, because I guess I thought it was like a blog that was typed and not a video blog. Although my misunderstanding was soon cleared up as I read on.

Finally, I noticed about half way through your story you used some thing along the lines of;

|skip the car ride|

I just feel like this almost interrupts the flow of the writing or reading. I know I may be sounding picky here but there's a way to keep your writing flow and sound good, things that you could use may include:

-Later that evening,...
-After I arrived at ____,...
-Around 8o'clock...

Just little things like that can put a little more of a perspective on your writing.

Other than those little things your writing was pretty much flawless. One of my favorite genres of movies and books is horror, and I loved reading this fan fiction all the more. You have executed this story well, and I can not wait untill I get the chance to read the second one! Also a little side note, I loved the Gifs you put at the end of each chapter they were a nice mood change when things got dark. Thanks for the great read!

Overall rating: 9.0

Notes

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Chears!
~Maggie